Thinking about Your Own Use of Paragraphs

It was junior year at a brand new school with lots of new people and different surroundings. Topic Sentence: I had signed up for a marketing class were you had to have a part-time job in order to be in the class, Supporting Statements: so i set out into the city of Zachary to go search high and heavy for a job. While out in the city going from store-to-store, and resturant-to-resturant, i got the same response,"we are not hiring". At first I'm like okay cool no one is hiring, but as I continue to look for o job high and heavy I kept getting that same response,"we are not hiring," which makes me try a different approach like since you are not hiring my I have an application anyway if you do not mind, and with that being said they would tell me that we are currently out of applications. Conclusion:So I try this approach a couple more time and get the same response, which made me so frustrated I began to cry.